Meeting — a WIPpet/ROW80 post


wippetwednesday_zps53e803c0What? Another WIPpet Wednesday?


So here we are–the 12th of June.  What do post, what to post….

How about 12 (fairly small) lines where ‘Ssellii finally gets to meet her brother?

‘Ssellii tried to remain calm. “That’s not what I meant, Uunsa. What magick is ‘Vesmai luu itau’? What does it—?” She stopped, realizing the words had once again worked their power, and this time her brother’s attention was for her, not the maid.

She realized in that moment that ‘Listii’s intense gaze was far more unnerving than she’d thought. Unlike Val, ‘Listii’s focus was direct, demanding answers…almost predatory in its determination. She felt her voice catch in her throat and swallowed.

And whatever ill thoughts she may have had toward the maid were banished as Uunsa broke the impasse and drew her brother’s attention from her to the state he was in.

‘Ssellii watched as the man looked at himself, where he was kneeling on the floor, and the disarray he was in. His eyes widened. Though he stayed silent, his gaze passed between both she and Uunsa accusingly. Then he made a rough, hurried attempt to rise and clean off his clothes and face with the cloth Uunsa held out for him.

If ‘Ssellii hadn’t known better, she would have said he looked exactly like a boy at the dinner table, one who had just been told he was still covered in stableyard debris and was now embarrassed and sullen.

Once standing, he didn’t leave the mess he’d made untouched, but slapped dashed the crumbs into a pile and scooped them on the plate. His cheeks were bright pink under the tan and grime. ‘Ssellii understood that this time ‘Listii  recognized the state he had allowed himself to come to in his flight from the world. This time he wasn’t going to simply feel like this visit was an inconvenience solely for him.

‘Ssellii smiled. This time her brother got to see what he really was, not the suave gentleman he might play for Uunsa. And he couldn’t simply hide in some daydream from the truth.

Taking her direction from the way Uunsa had diverted his accusing gaze from her to his own predicament, she rose. “Thank you, ‘Listii. That is so much better.” She motioned to the seat next to her. “Would you please sit down now and talk with me? We really do have a lot to discuss before we start back on the road, don’t you think?”

Later, she figured, she would have to ask the servant what those words meant again. For now she did not intend to lose the attention ‘Listii was giving her as she’d lost it the last time.

So, while it grated that she could not simply tear into him for playing this game he was dragging her into, she considered Uunsa’s tone earlier. It had been questioning, curious more than anything, as if the woman had asked her brother where he’d been, what he’d been doing there…how the weather was perhaps!

She decided to start simple. “Do you know who I am?”

Those raven eyes flicked in her direction. Though he answered softly, she could feel his disdain in his very posture. “Vissellii Marea, my sister.”

So there you go…  Hope you enjoyed it.

Inspired by K.L. Schwengel at My Random Muse #WIPpet writers post pieces of a draft (Work In Progress) that somehow relate with the date for commentary and consideration.  Feel free to comment and visit other #WIPpeters.   We love the company.  (Update: regarding the origin of the WIPpet, KL Schwengel says she did not create them–she just resuscitated them.   She credits Krista Walsh over at The Raven’s Quill for her introduction to the style…  Hmm, internet mysteries.)

ROW80 Check-in

ROW80LogocopyIt’s been a pretty awesome couple of days.  For those of you who saw my Sunday check-in, you know what I mean when I say that.

And for the record, the Boodle is pretty much back to where he was.  Overnight is a bit hard at the moment (the age-old parenting dilemma of “do I let the child sleep knowing that they are going to wake up miserable because they should have been given something to reduce their pain, or do I wake the child, disturb their sleep and know they will wake up refreshed?”  Oh.. and yeah–can I wake up at 3:30 in the morning without disturbing everyone else in the house?), but each day seems better and better.

I’m really glad we caught this in time.  The doctors did end up diagnosing Lyme.

That news, has of course, been at the center of my mind these past few days.  I did take a day of pretty much non-internet, non-writing related time for most of  Sunday and Monday.  For a bit of catharsis, I did manage to keep up to date on my monthly challenge.  And yesterday, I jumped right back into the swing of things with my JuNoWriMo writing sprints.  My internet situation wasn’t great, but at the end of the day, I’d pulled in another 4118 words.

On the topic of word counts…  Since the first of the month I have added over 30K to the Swan Song series, most of it on Courting.  And they’ve been good words too.  For example: I always had planned on including shapshifters in the story, and making one of my three main characters be one.  Alanii, specifically…  Thing was, I couldn’t think of a good spot to integrate that without making the story into something it wasn’t supposed to be.

Well, I found that spot, and Alanii now has discovered another part of who and what he is.

That’s all the good news.  The rest of the news is…  well, my social media presence has suffered.  I maintained some minimal contact on both Facebook and Google Plus.  I think I managed to visit everyone on the Sunday linky I was due to for my sponsor posts.  I did hit (hope it wasn’t too hard) eight ROWers’ blogs, but I didn’t even touch all the people I wanted to see.  I’m sorry I missed you guys.  Hopefully soon!

And that’s about all I have for you…

The ROW80 Writing Challenge is the brainchild of author Kait Nolan who felt that, in a world of WriMos and FastDrafts, people who want become authors  need something that promoted the daily habit of the writing life.  Feel free to visit some of our other members here.

19 responses to “Meeting — a WIPpet/ROW80 post

  1. “Though he answered softly, she could feel his disdain in his very posture. ” Nice. Has me wondering why the disdain, and wanting to know more about him.


    • Well, I;m not sure it’s actually disdain on ‘Listii’s part. He’s certain giving her a “are you kidding me? do I look like an idiot to you?” look, but ‘Ssellii’s got a bit of a huff going here and seeing things she probably shouldn’t in his behavior

      Needless to say… they’ve got some things to work out.

      Thanks for stopping in and commenting, Kathi.


  2. I sense a bit of bitterness towards her brother? – “he couldn’t simply hide in some daydream from the truth” I like that. And what exactly is that magick all about at the beginning…


    • Yeah, ‘Ssellii has some bitterness right now. She sees this sudden, near magical (it’s not really, but she doesn’t know enough about what has happened yet to realize that) transformation as ruining plans she’s had with Alanii for almost a year. Sudden change is always hard to process.


  3. Poor Boodle! I hope he gets all better soon!
    Listii is a more complicated character than I thought. I’m very curious about him. 🙂


    • Thank you, ReGi. Things in Boodle-world are MUCH much better now.

      I think ‘Listii is probably the most complicated character I’ve ever written. Every time I peel through a layer of him, I find more and more to puzzle out. I hope you’re enjoying my journey with him.


  4. It’s definitely been harder for me keeping upon social media and blogging too. I really liked the last line of your WIP about disdain even in the posture. I also liked your comparison to the boy being told he’s too dirty. Great job! See you sprinting sometime soon!


    • This is my second JuNoWriMo, Alana, and I’m finding this year more challenging than last for… well some obvious reasons. That said… It’s been better for social media and blogging. Being a volunteer for the JuNoWriMo sprints actually helps because I have a set schedule to work and write at. Otherwise… I’d be trapped in the story and not come out… (which is fun too, but Life(tm) doesn’t like it)


  5. “‘Listii’s focus was direct, demanding answers…almost predatory in its determination.” Ooh, I like that description very much!


    • Thanks, Sarah. Yeah, ‘Listii is quite …expressive when he wants to be, and right now, he’s really annoyed with his sister.


  6. So glad Boodle is on the mend/getting better. And I get the taking time away thing. When my kids get sick I can’t focus enough to do anything useful. Don’t push yourself too hard to catch up. You have to recover from it too in your own way. 🙂


    • I took the day off (pretty much) and just spent it, him and I… doing fun stuff. No panic about catching up , yet… maybe never. The lead I have on my wordcount may dwindle…. I had a great day with my kid.


  7. Sys,

    You must know how happy this makes me.

    MY ‘Listii is back! =D

    Although I feel for him, to suddenly realize the extent to which he’s let himself go, I am happy he is choosing to return to living.

    Now he can move forward. And I can watch.

    Life is very, very good – but I want to know what games he’s playing with the maid – do tell! =)


    • LOL! You would ask about the games he’s playing with the maid….. He’s not to that point in his life yet though. Give him a few years, and some different womenan. But yes, he’s creeping out of what he thought was the blackest time in his life. It’s just time for the hard stuff to start.


  8. Nice WIP snippet!

    {hugs} to the kiddo (and you!) I’m so glad you guys caught the Lyme early, it makes all the difference. I hope the kiddo bounces back quickly.

    You’re making great progress with your goals Eden. Wishing you a fabulous week.


    • Thanks, Raelyn. Yes, we’re really glad we caught the Lyme as fast as we did too. Of course, I have trouble even contemplating the alternative. (I mean, not exactly trouble contemplating it–I am a writer after all, but… in our lives and with my son? No, I can’twon’t contemplate it, if you take my meaning.)

      And yes, I’m actually much happier at the moment. This “letting life distract me and keep me from writing thing” was depressing, and not just professionally.


  9. So glad he’s feeling better! And I love watching how you work in the things that you want and need in your life, making adjustments as needed, sifting it all together. You remind me that if I keep paying attention to what’s needed I can shift my stuff around, too!


    • Of course you can, Kim. You’ve got so much awesome going on. I think it’s more that you let your doubts take over too easily. Please don’t… You are an amazing woman, and you’ve got creativity and stories and art… so much of all of these, that worlds open up. You just have to allow yourself to release them.


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