Games — a WIPpet/ROW80 post

Yep…  another Wednesday post… late.

I almost didn’t bother posting anything today.  I’ve raced around practically non-stop since Sunday, and my head has raced faster…  I just want to sleep, and even that’s been nearly impossible to achieve.  So I’m late, but I’m here, and I’m yawning…

Hopefully that means unconscious bliss in a bit.

Since it’s Wednesday it’s time for both a WIPpet and a ROW80 check-in.  Let’s play with the pet first.  They appreciate being noticed and played right away…


No fancy maths tonight.  You get ten (I think reasonably sized paragraphs) for the month of October back in Courting the Swan Song.  Alanii’s back home with his parents and is now in his father’s study where his father is filling him in on the way the man expects his son to behave from now on and why…

Alanii stayed his seat. If his father was still “making the rounds” as the man called his nervous energy, it was certain that there was more they would discuss. These days he knew enough to not just assume he knew what to do next. His father didn’t like that kind of behavior. His father liked to make people be surprised by his actions. In a sense, Alanii felt sorry for the man.

911: President George W. Bush Addresses Media in Oval Office, 09/13/2001.Lord of the Great Throne, named moral leader of all the Settled People, descended from Antian deKanas himself, and the man held little more than the power of a figurehead in most Vale affairs. When someone wished to defy the edicts of Anacniia, all he (or she, Alanii reminded himself bitterly of the Semisniis’ impending arrival) needed to do was gather the assistance of at least two of the major House lords to stand alongside in Council.

And now, Alanii’s father was allowing himself to be drawn into playing the same game, pledge his own heir to House Semis in hopes of making sure that House remained on their side for the future.

“Of course, if you were planning on selling me off to Tarran, Father, you could have approached him for the hand of his own daughter and not that of his cousin’s third born,” he said finally.

“As if Tarran would have accepted my offer after what you’d done in his Holdland,” his father snapped. “You, heir to the Great Throne itself, drew blade against his militia men in his own lands…”

“They never identified themselves as militia. They snuck into our rooms late at night, killed the tavern owner and nearly killed the man’s wife…” Alanii rose enough to face his father head on as the man came back around in his view. “I treated them as any man would have, as brigands and thieves.”

His father made a quick movement as if he were intending to argue, then shook his head and went over to take a seat at his desk. “It’s your word against Tarran’s. He says they were his men and that no one would have been harmed if you’d allowed yourselves to be taken for ransom like civilized men.”

Frustration, Frustration!“And you believe his word more than that of your son and Guard, Father?”

The man sighed. “I have no choice.”

Alanii shook his head. “You know he is lying. You know we’re telling you the truth. Yet you have no choice but to believe him? I don’t—I don’t know what to think about that, Father. Madness at the very least. Since when did the truth become a lie and a lie the truth just because Tarran said it?”

As always, a ginormous “Thank You” to K.L. Schwengel at My Random Muse for her hosting of WIPpet Wednesdays where writers post pieces of a draft (Work In Progress) that somehow relate with the date for commentary and consideration.  Feel free to visit other #WIPpeteers at the linky.  Company, comments…  even gentle (or not-so gentle) critiques are always welcome.


So, another check-in….  I’ve written almost nothing.  Notes…  notes for a beta read I was doing actually.  And I edited a bunch of story pieces…  I’ve read, some…  Mostly I’ve been driving and running errand after errand after errand.

Rosa multiflora, flower of January 2Oh and doing the weekly Wednesday field trip with my son’s school today.  Today was a challenging day.  We were blazing trails in a new nature preserve that was overrun with rosa multiflora.  Swampy land, lots of thorns, no trail and a bunch of kids in the woods with four adults, with only one set of clippers and one hatchet….  all at the height of deer tick season.

It was an exciting morning.  Fun, challenging,…  even a bit messy, but besides a few scratches, a few soaked shoes and a lot of noise, it was a normal day with these kids.

Now though?  Typing with my left hand is a bit hard.  I’ve gotten the slivers and thorns out, but they left some sore spots.  But it’s okay.  I’m proud of myself for crossing streams on fallen tree trunks (once with my shoe laces untied…though not intentionally!) and keeping all the kids with me from getting torn to pieces on those brambles.

SuccessAnd I got some great story ideas from the experience.  They haven’t fully coalesced yet, but I have a better visual for the rest of last week’s scene with Vissellii and ‘Listii.  I also know what’s going to happen in Courting before Alanii gets home to his father…

Oh, and I got a great workout too.    Hooray ROW80 Fitness!

As for my other goals?  No photos edited.  No photos taken either.  Though it would have been nice to have brought the camera on occasion these days, I’m glad I didn’t have with me today.  I like my camera.  I want to keep it a lit longer….

Sponsor duties?  Visits are on track,  but I still need to write that sponsor post (Sorry, Kait!).  At least I’ve gathered all my pieces together now.  I can write it (once I get settled for five minutes without something else calling to me).  It’s a start.

Sow how about you?  Any new experiences?

17 responses to “Games — a WIPpet/ROW80 post

  1. I can just see you with the kids in a wild place. Makes me smile. =) See?

    I like this scene, but it’s a little confusing. I’m guessing that if I read the entire WIP, though, I would understand better, so it’s probably a moot point.

    It sounds like you’ve earned the chance to rest, relax, and recover!


    • It was fun. I think you’d love their science teacher(s). Paul and John are wonderful guys. Paul’s all outdoors; John’s the staid lab-haunter… The two of them outdoors and then the kids, me and then Brittany (the “elementary” teacher). Discussions about coyotes and the body of one Paul found a few weeks before, where he placed the head so it could be found after Nature “cleaned it”. Even hauling abandoned tires and bowling balls out of the woods…

      Yeah, it’s that kind of a school.

      The confusion might be with the piece, it might not. I’m still trying to grasp Alanii’s voice here. I know he’s indignant, but he’s also trying to not upset his father too much… He knows his father is “wrong” but knows he started out by doing a bunch of things his father had told him not to do, etc..

      I got some rest. I need and want more… I also really want to get out and visit with you soon. Maybe we can have an actual writing cafe visit one of the NaNo weeks?


  2. This is my favorite line, “He says they were his men and that no one would have been harmed if you’d allowed yourselves to be taken for ransom like civilized men.” Made me snort. I’m really starting to like Alanii.


    • Alanii is awesome (yeah, so I’m a bit biased.. but actually, I’d love to just hang out with someone like him).

      As for the ransom thing, I actually got the idea from some tribal warfare practices among the Native Americans. There was a fair amount of “one-up-manship” where tribes would attack each other for the sake of ransoms only. Often no one was killed. A fair amount of the time the tribal chiefs and elders were on friendly terms with their “enemies” even…

      Glad you liked the discussion, Kathi. I always worry about pieces like this, worrying that they aren’t exciting or suspenseful enough..


  3. I keep saying this, but never do it, I really must sign up to WIPet Wednesday. Loved yours! Shame you had to suffer for more story ideas however! Take care…


    • Oh, Shah, you really should join us. It’s a wonderful group, and I think you’d have a lot of fun with us.

      As for the trip… I wasn’t really suffering. I’m beat, but I was pretty beat before I started the trip. Canning more applesauce and crab apple butter… I hate throwing food away, and it had gotten to the “process this or toss it” stage for a lot of the fruit we’d gathered. I was up until 3:30 in the morning handpressing sauce from crab apples because I knew I wouldn’t be home for the next few days and I still needed to get up at 6:30.

      It’s just how it is… 🙂

      Thanks for stopping in. Hopefully we’ll see you next week with your own “pet”?


  4. I really like this excerpt. Especially that last line.


    • Thanks, Fallon. I was a bit uncertain about how Alanii was coming off here. Sounds like most people think he’s doing “pretty okay”.


  5. Ha! What a perfect pre-November post. Success will come from your plans. Often fortune cookie fortunes for me are a dud, but occasionally you get those uncanny ones.


    • Fortune cookies…. I love getting them, but yeah, most are duds for me too, Jae.

      Pre-November… so you felt that underlying panic in my words, did you? It’s settling, but yeah… I’m feeling that shift in rhythms for sure.


  6. Wow, what a list! No wonder word production is coming up short. I promise you, it will get better when you’re a grandmother. *g*

    Nice excerpt. And major sympathy on having to type with one hand — that sucks big time! No way to create any kind of normal word counts with that kind of handicap, unless you have a dictation program.


    • Oh… Not thinking about being grandmother for a long time yet, Ruth. M. is only seven. (Though I imagine all this activity is going to be good for me when I do become a grandma….)

      Thank you, both for the kind words on the excerpt and the sympathies. It’s all better now. Just the remnants of the day’s adventures…. But you’ve got a point there about the dictation program. I should get mine running… just in case. I mean, I have another month of these field trips to do yet.


  7. I think Alanii’s doing alright in this scene getting that fine balance between indignation and not offending his father. Sounds like there’s an awful lot of pressure on the father and I’m sure Alanii must be seething underneath his (reasonably) calm exterior.

    That field trip certainly did sound like a challenge! But great fun too. 🙂


    • Alanii’s both seething and scared. It’s not a good combination, as you can guess. But I think we’ve all been in such a situation… where one desperately wants to rail against the system but knows that forcing things to change is likely to bring the system crashing down on one’s head.

      It was a challenge, but it was fun too. I didn’t go yesterday, and I’m feeling a bit of bittersweet happiness. I needed the rest but I am really enjoying those outings. 😀


  8. I love the WIPpet this week. Please forgive me: I didn’t read much else as I need to get back to my kiddies and just noticed your4 link when I went to update my mmm linky. This really is a great excerpt, though. 🙂


    • Oh, thank you, ReGi. (Sorry this reply is late. I’ve been demoted to my laptop for most things lately, and there’s something in the settings that I haven’t figured out that doesn’t let me get WordPress comments without lot of convoluted steps that… weelllll, basically, I tend to let things gather so I can do them all together as opposed to fighting the machine repeatedly).

      Hope all is okay with you and the kiddies. It’s been a busy month, ne?


  9. Busy. Yes. *flops onto couch* The kids are good, I just couldn’t spare much time at the moment. 🙂