Beyond Life — a WIPpet/ROW80 post

Cough and the Common Cold

Cough and the Common Cold (Photo credit: RobertFrancis)


Okay…  said it.  I feel bleh.  I have a head cold that is just draining all conscious thought from my brain.  I have a cough that won’t quit…  I feel bleh!

Sorry, had to get that out of my head.  Hope you all don’t mind.


Long story, short story…  the whole story: I goofed off all weekend, cleaned house, played Minecraft, and had some family time.  Now I’m hip deep in editing again, have started a full story-world bible to help me get a better grasp of my secondary characters and subplots, and I’ve added another two scenes to my Jayce and the Wheeled Warriors fanfiction.

I’m behind on my sponsor duties, and I missed my Sunday post (wish I could say I was sick then, but I really was just spacing).  That’s alright.  It was about being a Grinch anyway, and who needs a downer so close to the end of the year and all the holiday buzz?

So there’s not much to say here except “let’s do a…”


Simple maths today: 9 small paragraphs from Chapter 18 of Release:

It didn’t happen the way she’d said it would. Instead of a rush of strength outward, I was nearly crushed under the inrush of strength. For a minute I panicked, watching as Tam’s wife started to collapse against the altar, then checked myself and concentrated on blocking the channels she’d opened in my mind. As soon as the flow stopped, I rushed into the circle no longer caring if I followed the ritual or not.

Ellen looked up as I helped her from the stone to sit on the ground. “The firecall, Kieri. You have to do it,” she whispered, her voice barely audible.

I swallowed, wanting to apologize so much for messing things up. “I can’t…”

“Won’t,” she whispered. “No healer could…” She caught her breath for a second, then forced her gaze on mine. “Please, try. For me. For Kara. The words… Tyrai mishæ naityru.”

I clenched my fist for a moment, then let my gaze turn toward the altar behind us. My senses felt hyper aware. Though I was at the wrong angle to see Kara’s body laying there, I could see her. I was aware of every one of the people around us, the exact kinds of trees that circled our clearing, the rabbit that nestled with her young in a burrow several yards away. Could I do what she wanted? She said I could. But what she’d told me to say sounded totally wrong when I said it.

Mouse’s words rang in my ears about what I was. I wasn’t Dantii. Hellfires, Daryl Vestimorn had been the Andar’s son and hadn’t been talented at all. What made me think that as Alanii Vestimiir’s grandson I’d be any better? I looked apologetically at Ellen and reached into my pocket for my lighter. Maybe I wasn’t a witch like my grandfather, but I could give Kara a flame to pass her to the world beyond by more mundane means.

Reaching into my pocket made me brush the hilt of the Heir’s blade. I knew as soon as I felt it; just like before, there was a soft voice in my head.

~Nai, Kieri. Trust your instincts. Those words are not for your kind. Say rather Atarmilshiinai atarnii vashiir.~

The mind touch had felt like that of a woman, not the male one I’d heard before. For a moment, I wondered if it had been Kara’s spirit. After all, she was dead. Secrets about me that I didn’t even know would be common knowledge for anybody beyond life.

Funerals are never happy affairs, but usually they don’t come with collapsing priestesses and magic knives to add to the ambiance.  Kieri knows how to pick his venues, hm?

Many cheers and (non-physical) hugs to K.L. Schwengel for her bravery in fighting the forces of the internet and books that demand to be written for the sake of hosting WIPpet Wednesdays for us.  Feel free to show your love (or not) by commenting and visiting other WIPpeteers here.


23 responses to “Beyond Life — a WIPpet/ROW80 post

  1. Wow, action packed scene here – nice work! Hope you feel better soon. The health food store has this stuff called Umcka that I swear by – it is supposed to shorten the duration and intensity of colds.


    • Glad to hear that. I’m always a bit uncertain about my action scenes, so it’s great getting feedback from fellow readers.

      Umcka? I’ll have to check our co-op for it. Though at the moment, things are getting a lot better anyway… Slippery elm, ginger tea with honey and lemon, licorice. We’re on the mend here at the Mabee Household.


  2. Ooh, intimidating stuff! Great passage.


  3. Very intriguing. I love his thoughts about the afterlife and everyone knowing secrets about him. I don’t even want to imagine!

    And feeling Bleh! is never fun. 😦 Hope you are over it soon. Take plenty of time for yourself and lots of rest.


    • You know, I’d not thought about how his perspective was a bit odd that way, but yeah… Kieri does have some strange ideas about the afterlife. 🙂

      The bleh is fading… just in time to actually rest for some holiday visits. *does little happy bounce*


  4. Ah, I had that head cold last week! Still not quite gone, but much better.

    Nice excerpt! The squiggly symbols (~) threw me out, though, since I didn’t understand what they were supposed to mean. Maybe I just haven’t seen enough of this project yet.

    Get well soon!


    • I think the cold has been making its rounds… So unfair. I wanted to be the one who traveled the worl and met all my fellow WIPpeteers. 🙂

      Yeah, the tildes are a leftover from when I wrote some of these chapters on a DEC VAX-mini in EMACS. Since I couldn’t do decent italics and such, they showed mental communication and telepathy (is it still telepathy when it’s a knife who is doing the talking?)


  5. Blocked the channels she opened in my mind – very intriguing!!
    Sorry about your head cold. Best wishes for a speedy recovery!


  6. Eeee! I have two of those stuffed microbes! I have Martian Life and the Black Death. They are so cute and fuzzy!

    Also, Jayce and the Wheeled Warrior fics? Awesome!

    *sends virtual hot tea for the cough*


    • It really says something about us when I start doing an ‘inner squee” (had to be quiet about it here in the restaurant) when I envisioned a Black Death fuzzy microbe. 😀

      Heck yeah, Jayce and the Wheeled Warriors… It was a great cartoon. Too bad that it didn’t get the airplay it deserved because Mattel was more interested in selling toys (the worst part? They’d probably have sold more toys if they’d continued the cartoon).

      *sips tea, mmms* Thanks!


      • Here’s a link: — isn’t he just adorable?! Who’sa adorable scourge of the Medieval Europe? Who’sa responsible for massive socio-economic change? You is! Yes you is!!

        I don’t think I ever saw the Jayce and the Wheeled Warriors cartoon but I remember the books being in one of my local department stores. When the fic is done, I’d love to read it.

        And yeah, Mattel probably would have sold more toys if they’d followed Hasbro’s example and kept running the show.


        • Aww!!!!

          RE: The cartoon… some of it was really corny, but there were also some amazing episodes. It was one of the only 80s (American) cartoons where a character actually died,and the opening credits were…

          AWESOME! (See?)

          As for the fanfic, it may never be finished (it or any of it’s various incarnations, but if you’re interested, I can send you what I do have.


  7. Argh, I’ve been feeling pretty spaced out too, and don’t even have a cold as an excuse. Hope you feel better soon!
    Family time sounds good 🙂


    • I think the holidays help the spaced out feeling, Deniz. Thanks for the well wishes. Have a great week (and ROW80 break, holidays, and… more cool archaeologist interviews. 😀 )


  8. Yes, this is quite a funeral. Powerful and emotional stuff. Seems like there’s a lot of pressure on Kieri’s shoulders and that he’s meant for great things? I really liked the way you showed how hyper aware he felt about his surroundings too.

    Sorry to hear you’re feeling bleh. I sympathise as I have a cold and sore throat at the moment and bleh sums up perfectly how I’m feeling! Get better soon.


    • Sorry to hear you aren’t feeling well, Kate. Warm ginger tisane with honey and lemon helped me a lot when I was pregnant and had the ‘ick’.

      Kieri has the potential to do some wonderful things, but… well, he has more than a few lessons to learn before he gets there. (Of course, that’s why he’s fun to write about.)


  9. I’ve given up on being productive this month. I think I gave up somewhere around the weekend. So, more power to you for soldiering on. I do hope your cold gets better soon!

    That’s a rather eventful funeral. Hope mine doesn’t go like that. Though, I think Kieri is about to learn some stuff about himself through it all.

    Happy holidays. I’ll see you 2014!


    • Good point, I don’t think I want my funeral going like that either. Not that I think Kara minds much at this point (or if she does, she’s probably glad to know that people are trying so hard to give her a great send off).

      And yeah… Kieri is definitely going to learn some things. Though… he may have a small problem with processing it for a while.

      I thought about giving up too. A lot… decided against. It’s a great way to claim some “me time”


  10. I like this. Kieri is so full of self-doubt, edged with a bit of paranoia…it makes him interesting.

    One little nit – the phrase hyper-aware took me right out of the story. It just didn’t feel right.

    I wonder if colds are virtually communicable..I’ve got one too. Fuzzy head, a bit achy, an intermittent cough and sniffles. Just enough to keep me from feeling lie myself. Some tea, some Ricola, lots of Enterprise and rest, and absolutely no licorice! =)

    I’m glad you are feeling better, and hope the visiting and assorted festivities delight you!


    • Interesting how different people see different things (and like different things). The hyper-aware thing was partly to show how the increased mental energy Kieri had ‘stolen’ from Ellen was affecting him. But the phrase itself? yeah, I’m sure that could be tweaked.

      I’m wondering if, with all our electronics access, if we’re not becoming virtual cyborgs who are getting an internet virus. I mean, most of the WIPpeteers are sniffly. Things are a lot better here though. Had some rest, and licorice tea (awesome stuff!) has soothed the throat… Hoping you also feel better soon. Much love to you all.


  11. Oh, and will you send the link for these plushy microbes to me and/or the kids? They might be extremely popular with some people who live here…. =)