Mounted Soldiers

WIPpet

Feeling a bit torn today…  I’ve finally got myself writing some new story pieces (mostly back story, true) for Courting.  Yay!  New fiction!  Thing is, the scenes as they stand now (in their very, very rough draft state) would be huge spoilers (not to mention that they really don’t read like much yet with all the notes and “____” that I used when I couldn’t think of a name or specific detail I didn’t want to stop writing to look up later).

But, since any work on Courting means the story is still my Work In Progress, I can happily offer you a piece of second draft level work from the story…  three sentences worth (1+6 minus the month 4):

A few mounted soldiers in what looked to be Lanii House colors gathered at attention near a footman who now stepped forward into the middle of the roadway and blocking their path.

Next to him, Lanilis Kailiis have his mount a slight kick so that he might move to the head of their small formation. The man’s off hand reached into the fold of his coat to retrieve a folded pouch of leather.

Cheers, maybe some jeers, even a few beers…for all the WIPpeteers and our creative chaperon, K.L.Schwengel, Queen of Flying Monkeys (among other things).

ROW80 Check-in

ROW80LogocopySome small progress since Sunday.  I guess that makes sense…  Two days are not that long of a time really.  But it’s progress, and I get a feeling it’s progress I’m going to be happy with for a while.

  • write every day; at the minimum, do 5 sentences didn’t write on Monday, but all better now…
  • finish a complete (rough) draft of Courting the Swan Song   started writing some backstory about Alanii’s mother and her ties to the Lanii family, as well as the ritual of Rebirthing
  • make twice weekly blog posts (WIPpet Wednesdays and Some Thing 4 Sundays) check
  • maintain active sponsor participation  check
  • energize myself with more physical activity  “dancing” in the kitchen and use of handweights…
  • reclaim my writing space no progress here, save gathering papers I’d scribbled notes on in one place for typing
  • go through some piece of my electronic home (desktop, laptop, server space, Dropbox, etc.) I watched old episodes of Cold Case and typed in some notes from scraps of paper around my desk
  • laugh more, hug my family more, share myself with friends more…  some extra family time, poetry reading and hugs with the Boodle.  Plans to get together with friends for dinner …well, a lot of things, including the weather, postponed those.
  • attend chats and sprints on Twitter (at least one of each) none

28 responses to “Mounted Soldiers

  1. The WIPpet…I like the suggestion of things to come, but the prose…you might want to look it over. You know that thing we both do sometimes when our minds are going and we just keep writing like we were still trying to write one sentence with all the vocabulary words in it so it just goes on for half of forever without taking a breath and man am I glad we got all that practice in choir because my lungs aren’t as young as they use to be and…

    Yeah. That. =)

    And, after all that, I want to know what’s in the leather pouch, and more about Alanii’s mother, and so well done! =)

    Hopefully, next week will not include 3 inches of snow, poison anything, or other tragedies major or minor.

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    • Hmm, sounds like there was more than a bit of run on going here. I’ll definitely look into it, Shan. Though this has been edited once or twice, it’s as likely that I added stuff as cleaned up what was there.

      Still working on Alanii’s mother’s story, but… well, she is turning into quite the character. She may demand a book all her own.

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      • Well, I got into it, and you know what happens when I get into it…I almost looked for some vocabulary words to slip in! =D

        I love when characters develop that way. That’s what happened with Henry, who was just supposed to be a one-scene catalyst – and now, look at him, calmly stepping into a leading role as though that’s just where he’s meant to be…

        And it is!

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        • I’m glad you got into it then.

          As for Alanii’s mom… well, um… it’ll be interesting it that does happen. She hasn’t exactly reached my sympathetic side yet. But she is VERY interesting.

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  2. I’m guessing the contents of that pouch aren’t going to make anyone happy.
    I figure anything that’s not published is a WIP. That’s my definition anyhow. Mainly because for me, if it’s not out there, I’m always tempted to fiddle with it. 😉

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    • Hmm, anything not published is pretty open… could end up being scary. 😉

      The contents of the pouch themselves might not be so dangerous, but… the reason they’re being used might be a problem. 😀

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  3. Good scene Eden. Makes me think the situation’s a bit volatile, but I may have misread it. 🙂

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    • There are a lot of volatile people… I mean, situations, in this story, Elaine. 😀

      How’s the new job going?

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      • Hi Eden. The job’s OK but I’m feeling a bit overwhelmed with all that I’ve got to do. I’m hoping I’ll settle into it OK and find my own pace without getting too stressed. 🙂

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        • Glad to hear things are mostly good. It’s a new experience, so give yourself time to adjust without worrying that everything be done perfect right away.

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  4. Glad to hear you’re happy with your progress, Eden! And you’re quite right, two days isn’t a lot to judge — but if the feeling of accomplishment is there, that’s great. 🙂

    Nice snippet too. Caught one typo: “Lanilis Kailiis have his mount …” –> gave

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    • Thanks for catching that typo, Ruth. Sometimes the eyes just stop seeing the words, and little things like that … well, that would escape every spell checker out there, and most people would mentally substitute the correct word.

      As for the check-in… yeah, I have some issue with the twice a week schedule, but I do get Kait’s perspective that having the steady reminder and contact with one’s goals can help people stay on target

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  5. Sounds like you made some good progress. I recently reclaimed my writing space from the stacks of paper that had been piling up. It was amazing how much stuff I was keeping that I didn’t need. I still have some bins of older papers to go through, but the stacks are gone. It feels so great to work in a clean, organized space!

    Good luck with your goals!

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    • I don’t know about you, Denise, but it’s really easy to hold on to a lot of stuff I don’t need just because of that “who knows” curse. I’ve been trying to break free of it. Sounds like you’ve managed to do that some. Good for you! 🙂

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  6. Sounds like you made decent progress!

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  7. YAY for new projects. There’s nothing quite like starting a new story 🙂

    Hmmm… I wonder what’s in the pouch!

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  8. Hmm… Is this good news? Or bad? It could go either way. Or I missed something in the intro (sorry, it’s allergy season – fuzzy brain).

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    • Hmmm, I think I’m missing something now. The fact that I’m finally writing again is good news. The fact that Alanii and his escort are being stopped in the middle of the road by armed soldiers is… well, that would be giving things away.

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  9. I’m a bit late making my way to the WIPpeteers this week, but better late than never, right? 🙂

    Oooh – sounds like some action is afoot! What can be in that folded leather pouch? Intriguing!

    I agree with your goal to laugh more and hug family and friends more. That’s what life’s all about!

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    • I feel like I’m running perpetually late this week, so you’ve got no criticism coming from me.

      Yeah, something is afoot. We’ll see if all those diplomacy lessons Alanii has received end up helping him at all. 🙂

      I think it’s my best and most important goal personally.

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  10. You may have already noticed but you’ve got “have his mount” rather than “gave his mount”. 🙂 This is an interesting excerpt. I, too, want to know what’s in the pouch and if it’s going to help get past the men blocking the path.

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    • Ruth noticed that g/h substitution, Emily. But it’s never bad to have a second sharp set of eyes out there. Glad to know people found it interesting. I was worried about t being too descriptive, yet I wanted enough tension… Thank you

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  11. Don’t sweat it. You might be feeling slow but sometimes that’s how it all flows. It can’t always be Niagara Falls. Progress is still progress. Head up!

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    • Too true, Ryan. And really, why would I want it to be? Barring its size, Niagara Falls is pretty boring. There are so many more interesting waterfalls out there. 😉

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