Rain, Rain… Coming Down


Pretty much the skies here

Rainy, dreary days, like today, sap the mental circuits.  I’ve stared at this monitor for almost two hours already, and I still don’t know what direction to take this post in.  I mean, it’s not a lack of writing (or ideas).  Creatively, life has been good, and the muses have been generous with their gifts.

What do I see?  Sunshine reflecting off a car window outside…  Ooh, sparks!  Will it be enough to kickstart the old gray matter?

Oh, it’s gone now.

But it was here long enough for me to read over the last few scenes I was writing in The Was Variation (hmm, I’ve got to stop calling it my Jayce and the Wheeled Warriors fanfiction; the story left that world nearly a novella’s worth ago and has dwelt solely with my storyworld since).  Looks like you’re going to get five small paragraphs from the fourth Variation “book” today:

In this excerpt, ‘Listii and Alanii have been dragged into the medical office of their military base for a not-routine check-up.  This is from ‘Listii’s POV; just for you, Shan.

“Glad to hear that,” he muttered. He gave Alanii a wry grin as the man looked on with an odd expression. He wondered if the man still envied him this. It wasn’t as if the device had done all they’d hoped. Except that he didn’t need to be conscious to take an arringtine pill, he still wasn’t going to make it too long without his ‘tianiel.

He knew he was wincing, nervous twitches running along his body as Koru took his readings, stimulating his system in various ways. When he’d first received the implant, he’d tried holding back his reactions. Now he just let them flow through and past him. It was another annoyance like any other in life. He’d volunteered to be the program guinea pig anyway. What right did he have to complain?

“What you smiling at, blue-eyes?” he grumbled. He hated being hooked in this way, hated it even more when others were around to watch it. Why in Her Name hadn’t Valary hadn’t taken ‘Myyu to another room yet? At least she was able to get up and leave when he caught her gaze and mouthed, ‘take him out’. Alanii was as stuck as he was at the moment.

Alanii was gnawing at his lip the way he did when he was wishing he had his pipe. But the man did stop long enough to give him a real smile. “Nothing serious. I just was wondering what we might see if we plugged you into one of the master viewers in the Council Hall. Do you get good reception?” The man’s mouth twitched as the tech next to him undid the tourniquet. He rolled down his sleeve before waiting for a bandage.

“A hell of a lot better than you’re going to when they let me up.” He glared at Alanii. Bad enough he had to deal with this. Did the man have to add bad jokes on top of it all? “You’re taking longer than normal, Senior,” he said after a bit. “What’s that damned screen telling you?”

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ROW80 Check-in

ROW80LogocopyOh, happy day!  Excepting this morning’s slow start, things seem to be on the upswing.  Guarded cheers…  Today’s been pretty much… well, not so up.

  • write every day; at the minimum, do 5 sentences new story, most of the first draft of my sponsor post, plus
  • finish a complete (rough) draft of Courting the Swan Song   more backstory on Andre; she’s becoming such a fun character to explore
  • make twice weekly blog posts (WIPpet Wednesdays and Some Thing 4 Sundays) not only the basics, but an extra post this week!
  • maintain active sponsor participation  check
  • energize myself with more physical activity  Easter Egg hunts, volunteer time, playgrounds….  I kept busy
  • reclaim my writing space no progress here
  • go through some piece of my electronic home (desktop, laptop, server space, Dropbox, etc.) nice shiny clean Inboxes
  • laugh more, hug my family more, share myself with friends more…  I could use some more of this today; it’s been a hard day, even if yesterday was full of cuddles….
  • attend chats and sprints on Twitter (at least one of each) two

Time to go now.  Tonight is the Boodle’s promotion to a Blue Belt in karate.  Need to get the boy soon and get him to the dojo for warm up.

17 responses to “Rain, Rain… Coming Down

  1. Nice piece Eden! I really like that he was missing his pipe. That came to life for me as I read, I could see him.:)

    And that sky is reminding me a bit of Texas. Storms could be spotted miles away.


    • ‘Listii’s been friends with Alanii for years by this point. He can pretty much read the man like a book (and often makes a point of letting Alanii know that), but in this case, I think Alanii got the better of the teasing to get ‘Listii that riled. 🙂

      And upstate NY too. I remember some storms like this on my grandparent’s farm. Impressive aren’t they?


  2. Just so happens I was doing my active sponsor thang and stopped by. So, how did the Boodle do?


    • Well, glad to have you here, John. Here, help yourself to some tea. 🙂

      The Boodle did very well. Got a little flustered during his self-defenses, but not enough to stop him. And now there’s a shiny new blue belt here at the house.


  3. You gave me ‘Listii! =D

    There’s nothing quite like ‘Listii when I wasn’t even expecting him. And even when he’s sulking and Alanii temporarily has the better of him – heck, maybe especially then!

    Sorry your day held ick. Ick is no fun. May the storm pass quickly, or at last offer the beauty of clouds…

    Please convey my congratulations to that boy! I hope to be able to do it myself soon, but he shouldn’t need to wait.


    • Glad you enjoyed, Shan… though, when isn’t ‘Listii sulking 😉

      Actually, he’s in a pretty good mood at this point, or was until he got dragged to the medical center suddenly. But he just can’t let Alanii get away with that much snark. 😀

      Will do. He’s pretty proud of himself, justifiably.


  4. I really stumbled over this line, “Why in Her Name hadn’t Valary hadn’t taken ‘Myyu to another room yet?” Crashed right out of the excerpt, re-read a couple times, then just had to shrug and move on. I love the teasing in this piece though. Missing the pipe is such a nice little character detail to throw in there.


    • Yeah, I was afraid that line would be a problem. It works in context (Myyu is ‘Listii’s son whom he had with him when he’d been dragged off for this test, and Valary (his niece and a nurse at the medical office) offered to watch the boy (Myyu is 3 years old) while ‘Listii was “plugged in” to the machine for his diagnosis… and ‘Listii’s frustrated that she didn’t take his son out of the examining room, because he doesn’t want his son to see him this way… effectively taken over by a machine and turned into a twitchy puppet.

      I don’t think Alanii would forgive me if I forgot details like his pipe. He’s such a brat. 😉


  5. Congrats on the blue belt in the house, as well as on your progress!

    Great interaction in today’s snippet. There is one “hadn’t” too may in this sentence, though: “Why in Her Name hadn’t Valary hadn’t taken ‘Myyu to another room yet?” Easy to read right over when we make those kinds of slip-ups, isn’t it? 🙂


  6. So many great details here! I especially like his foul humor, though. Haha. I guess I’m a sucker for a grumpy dude. 🙂 I love when he says, “What are you looking at, blue-eyes?” It says so much about the world and characters – really propels me into an alternate universe. Brava!

    I feel ya about cloudy days. That’s what caffeine was made for. Imbibe! 🙂


    • O, you’re going to love Valistii then, Xina. I mean, it’s not like he’s a bad guy, for a trained killer, but he’s got so much snark…

      I did imbibe freely of the caffeine yesterday. Two much in fact… have an abscessed tooth and it made things flair up…. whoa boy!


  7. Ick. That sounds unpleasant.