Pinnacle

The Pinnacles in Mulu National Park

The Pinnacles in Mulu National Park (Photo credit: Erwin Bolwidt)

I almost didn’t do a post at all this week.  It’s end of school year crazy, JuNoWriMo has kicked in full force…  and, remember those teeth I said were bothering me?  Two extractions (one still in the works) and oral surgery coming at the end of the month.

Excitement all around….  hey, it’s even time for the:

WIPpet

MjAxNC04ZjBlYTU5ZmNiZjdiZjY4To avoid confusion, a bit of framing…

I’ve jumped a page or two in Phuque Ewe (also called the Unnamed Story) to get to this week’s WIPpet.  We’re still in ‘Listii’s bedroom at the Hastor family Home with Atyr and Valistii, still in the heat of things, both trying to escape in each other as ‘Listii’s brother attempt at ritual suicide hovers over the Hastor household.  The POV shifts here to Atyr and her feelings about what is happening…between them.

Australia pinnacle

Australia pinnacle (Photo credit: Kenny Teo (zoompict))

Five paragraphs for the 5th of June.

She found herself hovering at that pinnacle she had touched so many times before. Her thoughts were less on their bodies now and more on the mutual pleasure between them, on life, on heaven….the gods only knew what else.

No coherency there.

Random happy memories–maybe they were memories; somehow she suspected they’d never happened–passed though her mind. She wondered fleetingly what was taking him so long to join her, to dance on that pinnacle with her.

She reached with gentle, loving mental hands into his thoughts, feeling his love for her, his delight with her foremost.

Feeling his ultimate refusal to surrender to his desire more than he had.

And as with most things I write, I can find a song to fit the mood…  This one does pretty well:  No Doubt’s “Don’t Speak”.

K.L. Schwengel, of My Random Muse,  fearlessly leads the #WIPpet where writers post pieces of a draft (Work In Progress) that somehow relate with the date for fun and discussion. Feel free to comment and visit other #WIPpeteers here. We love company.

ROW80 Check-in

ROW80LogocopyI’m just not functioning at my best this week.  Worse yet, the degree of malfunction has been such that I now know how poorly I was functioning before this point.  I skipped my Sunday post (yet again) and seriously considered skipping today’s post as well.  I would have, if I hadn’t had the WIPpet section ready as a draft.

I mean, things aren’t “horrible”.  I am writing.  I am editing.  I am getting out and about, having lots of hugs and family time.  I’ve gotten my camera batteries recharged so I can get out and enjoy all these great flowers and the run-off waterfalls we will be having this weekend (and possibly even some cool Revolutionary War re-enactment at the historic Mabee Farm on Saturday).  Life is happening at its usual pace.

The Mabee Farm house

I just feel completely unable to handle the task.

I know on an intellectual level that this is just the family depression kicking me in the pants.  I’ve fought with depression enough over the years I know and recognize the symptoms.  Usually it doesn’t hit me now.  June is usually one of my best months.  But it’s been an extra stressful year already, and I’ve already dealt with the swings twice since  December.  I don’t know where I’m going to get the energy to fight this extra dose… not when I haven’t fully pulled myself out of the hole.

So, anyway…  I make no promises this time about a Sunday post.  If all goes well, I’m hoping I’ll be too occupied with family out-and-about time to think of blogging.

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12 responses to “Pinnacle

  1. After reading that last sentence my first thought was, What a stubborn man! After reading it a second time, it’s still the same 🙂

    Ooooh, a revolutionary war reenactment – that sounds like it would be fun to check out! The only reenactments we have out here are either for the Ren Faire, or civil war reenactments. There are also some western shooting competitions – which one of these days I’ll drag my husband to go check out.

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    • We stayed home (sort of… went out to a plant nursery and got some plants to start in the yard). There’s a Ren Faire this weekend… That seemed to be the more popular choice.

      ‘Listii is a pretty pigheaded SOB at times. I think that’s why I like him so much.

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  2. That must be very frustrating for Atyr to feel ‘Listii’s reluctance to give more of himself over to her.

    Sorry to hear you’re going through a low spot. I hope it turns around for you soon.

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  3. Sys,

    First off…

    *Big Hugs!* It’s not velvet-collar season, so I’m assuming it’s safe. =)

    Second….this one. This one has the feel I remember from this scene (it as the one I was thinking of.). Actually, it’s considerably better than the last time I read it.

    I especially like that last line. It’s powerful. It feels sad and desperate and a little prophetic, all at once.

    It feels like Atyr and ‘Listii, in a moment where solace and pain are twisted together inseparably.

    Yum.

    We haven’t been to the Mabee Farm yet. Lise is wanting to check out the Pine Bush, though, so maybe we could try to get together for that this summer…if you want.

    As for everything else…slowly. Gently. Sometimes it’s just not about the writing so much as it is the living…

    Much love.

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    • Writing is living sometimes… or at least, when I don’t get a chance to spend time with my characters, I feel lost and without direction. And Mommy-time isn’t the same. Yes, awesome in its own way, but it’s different, and I need my writing too.

      Glad you enjoyed the scene. Glad the feelings I felt from Atyr came through.

      And… well, the Boodle doesn’t want to go to the Mabee Farm thingie. So… we’ll figure out some other things to do. The Pine Bush is nice, especially during blueberry season. Lots of wild blueberries. Though, right now they’re doing a lot of reconstruction of the area, removing invasive species, etc. Large swaths of the bush have been cleared, looking rather desolate.

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  4. Great excerpt Eden. I like the way you’re focusing on her mind, what she’s feeling and experiencing mentally. 🙂

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    • I’m trying to do that. Though, according Wendy Sparrow’s recent post, I have a long way to go. http://wendysparrow.com/2013/06/writerly-wednesday-going-deep/ And here I’d thought I’d come such a long ways.

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      • Thanks for linking to my post–but I have to say…there is always room for improvement in this–deep POV is like that–and I still have a long way to go also. I felt like a bit of a hypocrite writing posts like that, but of course the person who finds a solution is often the person with the problem.

        Your excerpt is great. 🙂 Lots of emotion. Keep at it. We’ll both keep at it. *hugs*

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        • I was very impressed with your post, Wendy, and so, felt I needed to pass it along. Sorry if it upset you, but even if you feel that you need a lot of work in writing the deep 3rd POV, you clearly have found points that I have never even dreamed needed dealing with. So thank you, very much.

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  5. I really the description of the mental exploration. There’s a distinct bittersweetness about this scene.

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