It Suits Me Poorly

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Good morning, and welcome to my fourth Weekend Writing Warriors installment. The rules are simple enough:

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  • Keep your excerpt 10 sentences or less (8-10, no more!)
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For today’s #8Sunday post, I offer you eight sentences from my present WIP, Courting the Swan Song. Here, Alanii and his escort have found themselves drawn to a merchant’s tent by the singing of a young woman.

“Welcome all, come. Look at how the harp blends with our lady’s voice, creating a harmony out of even the most unusual ranges.” Then, as if the man had not been thinking of how insulting his words could be taken, he glanced at the young woman.

The lady had, however, at his speech, stopped her performance abruptly and risen. She held out the instrument to the man. “Thank you, but I’m afraid it suits me poorly, sir. Hopefully your perfect customer will find delight with your craftsmanship.” Without waiting for the man to do much more than stammer, she reached out and plucked her parasol from the man’s hand. Then, lifting it over her head again, she stepped from the center of the circle in Alanii’s direction.

Thank you for reading; I hope you enjoyed the snippet. Coming up for WIPpet Wednesday, please enjoy a sample of the Was Long Variation.  For the month of June, I will be switching all my bloghop snippets to this work as I dive full-steam in the ♥Just Write♥ madness that are JuNoWriMo and Ready. Set WRITE! challenges.

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28 responses to “It Suits Me Poorly

  1. Ooh, you’ve perfectly captured the lady’s polite, yet icy composure!

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  2. Good for her putting him in his place. I’m interested to know what will happen next when she comes in contact with Alanii.

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  3. Wonderful excerpt — the woman has the last laugh!! “It suits me poorly,” . . . I love it!

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  4. I didn’t really see an insult in what he said but of course I couldn’t hear the music LOL. Interesting snippet!

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    • Well, by suggesting that the instrument was what was making the music so pleasing to the ear, he was pretty much saying she had no talent otherwise, and considering who she is and her training… it was a huge insult.

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  5. You’ve set up an interesting and subtle interchange between the lady and the merchant.

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  6. What a polite young woman.

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  7. Great snub. Love the snippet.

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  8. Maybe he should have thought twice before he spoke!

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    • Long story short… the shopkeeper would never in a million years have thought she’d be willing to call him out for his rudeness. He didn’t know what he was dealing with by far….

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  9. Your writing is smooth and descriptive. I guess she told him! 🙂 I like “…suits me poorly.” An unusual string of words, but it’s catchy!

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    • Thanks, Teresa. As I said… I like a mix of words from the $.10 ones to the $2 ones. The instrument may suit her poorly, but the phrase suits her wonderfully. 😀

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  10. Karen Michelle Nutt

    You do not want to insult a lady. lol Enjoyed the snippet.

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    • No, you do not want to insult a lady, especially this one… she has brothers, and she’s pretty tough as it is. Glad you enjoyed it, Karen.

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  11. I like this–and I like Alanii.

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  12. Oh, she’s going to be an interesting character! I hope there’s more of her?

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  13. Very nice! For some reason, the phrase, “plucked her parasol”, is now stuck in my head.

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    • Hmm, yeah, it is a bit alliterative, isn’t it? Well, I guess it works well enough since no one else commented on it yet. Though plucking is very much the image in my head of her action.

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  14. Interesting to come in on the story here… I had to work out that my posts were indeed coming from http://www.wewriwa.com and find my way to eden’s blog

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