The Unclean Animal

Wednesday already? Ah, well, since I have to spend today at the dentist getting yet another crown in my mouth, I think I’ll post a piece that inspires a similar level of cringe.  Well, sort of…  I know what’s coming up in the story.

This WIPpet comes from a newer section of the Was Long Variation.  Because it developed from a fanfiction, I guess it still technically is, though it has long left any world but my own.  Warning: slightly (very slightly) NSFW

WIPpet maths:
(6+3)-(2+0)+(1+5) = 13 sentences (w/ a 1-word sentence bonus)

The creature–he was not as aroused as he had been. Whatever had been done to him, likely he no longer could appreciate a woman who wanted to be with him. That was fine, she guessed. Even if he spruced up to become the most handsome being in all creation, Atyr was only doing this because neither of them had a choice. Since she wanted to get this over with and since she didn’t want to surrender what little self-control she’d managed to acquire, she decided to take matters into her own hand. Literally.

The man jerked back as she touched him, his eyes wide. As a grunt of surprise escaped his lips, Atyr thought of Twan and the Faithful that stood near. Let them think the unclean animal in her had taken over if they wanted. She needed to stay in charge. Whatever this man had been long ago, one thing she did know—he was too intense. She suspected his talent was empathy. If so, she couldn’t risk letting him flood her with his needs and fears. She’d been in that place before, and she would rather die than find herself there again.

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18 responses to “The Unclean Animal

  1. They sound like they’re in a no-win situation for both of them. How awful.

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  2. Interesting. I like her personality coming through this–how you portrayed it.

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    • It really is a piece that tries to portray her personality, so I’m glad that worked. Trying for a layered effect… the person others see her as, how she tries to be seen, how she sees herself, then what she does…

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  3. Yikes. Hope the dentist was ok. This makes me feel sorry for whatever she’s been through.

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    • Dentist was… good, sore jaw, but that’s to be expected. It’s funny… because though Atyr’s been through so very much, she doesn’t see herself as a victim, just one who does what she must…

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  4. Well written…very engaging! 🙂

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  5. That’s a really tricky situation to be in. I hope it ultimately works out well for both of them.

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    • For her… things eventually get better. For him… well, at this point I’m not sure he knows what better is anymore. He’s been a prisoner for a long time.

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  6. Interesting. The whole being watched vibe is rather… unsettling though.

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  7. Ooo! What’s the unclean animal? Is that like a Dr. Jekyll-Mr. Hyde thing? Now I’m curious what it was a fan fiction of, though. You may have told us at some point, or many points, but I’ve forgotten.

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    • It is a bit of a Jekyll-Hyde thing, but less visual and more internal/emotional. No biggie though… The unclean animal actually has nothing to do with the original cartoon series I based this off of. That, though, was Jayce and the Wheeled Warriors.

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  8. That’s a very intriguing snippet. I feel bad for both of them, it seems like they’re in a very difficult situation–even worse for being watched… Will we get to find out more? (I hope so!)

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    • I don’t know if I’ll be posting more of this piece for a while yet–it leads very quickly to spoilers. Glad you liked it though.

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