So Deliberate

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Today’s excerpt from the Was Long Variation is slightly NSFW…  perhaps a PG13 rating.  As I intend to return to Courting the Swan Song in the next week for my WeWriWa posts, I figured it wouldn’t hurt to end on a bit of a bang.  😀

Salty, sweet, tender… He kissed her tears; he murmured assurances he didn’t believe. He needed to hear them. Her heart pounded so–he felt her blood move beneath her skin. Or perhaps it was his. He and She merged, writhed, as they drew together into a nest of sheets torn from the bed. Her fingertips lingered in their journey along his neck and shoulders; his danced through the laces of her bedgown. Her breath was hot, her voice gruff and harsh. He felt her quiver where they touched, knew before he made a move whether it would please her, knew what pressure to use, when to let go… And so strong, so deliberate were her own caresses, he knew she sensed the same from him.

Thank you for reading; I hope you enjoyed this snippet from the Was Long Variation for a time.  Coming up for WIPpet Wednesday, please enjoy an excerpt sample from Courting the Swan Song.

Has anyone else participated in either the JuNoWriMo and/or Ready. Set WRITE! challenges?  How did you month go?  Are you racing to the finish line for the JuNo?  Have you met your goals for Ready. Set WRITE! consistently?

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40 responses to “So Deliberate

  1. “He needed to hear them.” — He, I love it. OMG, your snippet is hot this week, awesome job. Love the intensity.

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    • Thanks, Neva. I try. (I just wish I’d been a bit more original… I’d forgotten, but I’d posted this before, in a larger excerpt). It’s steamy, but… as Aurora notes, a bit bittersweet as well.

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  2. Seems bitter sweet if he doesn’t believe whatever he assures her.

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  3. Great snippet, very steamy and romantic. 😀

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    • Glad you liked it. If you’re interesting in a much longer piece of the same, the whole scene is here… I’d completely forgotten I’d posted it.

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  4. Great snippet- Powerful and sexy!

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  5. Oh Eden, this is from the original Garden of. Tentative and lovely, tormented and fulfilling. Excellent.

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  6. What a sense of connection and distance at the same time. Sounds like they have some things to work out, still.

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    • They do; they definitely do…. Did you see the larger excerpt I posted that this comes from? Your observation suggests you might enjoy it.

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  7. Passionate excerpt filled with chemistry and their connection. My only concern is that he is giving her assurances he doesn’t believe. Looks like things are about to take a turn for the worse. Great snippet.

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  8. Wow, passionate and steamy and lovely words…terrific excerpt!

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  9. I notice how you not only told us this was in a male POV but subtly communicated this, as well, with the emphasis rather more on the physical things he does than on interior emotions. Nicely done.

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  10. Awesome! Hot and romantic at the same time.

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  11. oh wow, lovely excerpt.

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  12. “he murmured assurances he didn’t believe. He needed to hear them.” Love that!

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  13. Oh, lovely and romantic. I love how he needs the assurances for himself- very sweet.

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  14. If this isn’t ‘Listii and Atyr, don’t tell me. I want to pretend it is, because it FEELS like them! You’ve always written this type of scene beautifully. My favorite here? ‘his danced through the laces of her bedgown.’

    I just love that image – dexterity and intent and passion all rolled up together in that small motion…

    Sigh….

    I finished my JuNo count yesterday; still have a bit over 2 scenes to wrap things up, so I should have a completed draft by the end of the month (maybe by the end of today, even….).

    I tend to set larger goals than I can attain, but I know that about myself, so it doesn’t bother me overmuch if I don’t get through them all in an arbitrary time period. I’ve been moving lots of things forward, and learning a lot, so I call that a solid win! =)

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    • Would it make it better to let you know that this perfect moment falls on the floor and goes womp, womp, womp and then tell you it’s not ‘Listii and Atyr? 😉

      Thanks though. Glad to hear about your great JuNoWriMo progress. I lagging somewhat… though our crew wordcount chart looks like a dead standstill, I have been writing, but a little of 800words a day is not enough to make JuNo numbers. I’m just glad you’re getting beyond that set of scenes you dreaded so much.

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      • I can live with it being someone else, and even having the moment end up failing…

        But it’s fun to pretend that it’s them, and all proceeds well…

        I finished JuNo, but it took me till yesterday to finish the draft. I’m still embroiled in Snowflake plotting for Foul Deeds Will Rise, but, once I finish (hopefully by the time Round 3 starts on Monday), I should be able to catch up fairly quickly – the story is taking shape in my mind, and I’m liking where it’s going…

        I’m also happy those scenes are behind me, at least for now…

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        • I’m glad for the scenes being done. I know they were pummeling you emotionally. It seems that Vaara might push your buttons in time, but then again, it doesn’t sound like she has the same level of malice that Howard did in her.

          And I’m glad you enjoyed the scene for either characters.

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          • Actually, Vaara has never pushed my buttons. It’s strange…but something about her…I want to help her, and I understand her…

            Maybe it’s that what she does, she does in the name of balance…yes, sometimes she’s way off on what balance is, but she wants to make things better than they are…

            Howard doesn’t have that desire, and, for me, that makes a huge difference..

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  15. Karen Michelle Nutt

    Tantalizing but romantic in his need to be wanted. Wonderful snippet.

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  16. Wonderful uses of the sense to draw in the reader. Sensual and full of emotion. Nicely done, Eden! 🙂

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  17. Yeah… that’ll work. I could practically taste the salty sweat. Very nice.

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  18. So sorry for the delayed comment this week around. I’m playing catch up on Sunday Snippets.

    My first reaction: Wowza! That is some intense scene you got going there and so perfectly described. I love how you worded it.
    This line though, “… he murmured assurances he didn’t believe. He needed to hear them.” That stood out to me. He needed to hear them? He’s saying them for himself? That’s something you don’t hear very often and I love how it builds to it. These two seemed very in tuned to each other. Great snippet!

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