A History of War

This was actually last week’s WeWriWa post, but since I forgot to add the link to the linky… I’m reposting, mostly because I’m running behind on a lot of online stuff due to the holidays and teaching paperwork. 😦

Thanks for your patience. Hope you all had a great couple of weeks.

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Good morning, and welcome to my ninth installment for the Weekend Writing Warriors. The rules are fairly simple:

  • Add your name and genre(s) to the most recent post on the WeWriWa site
  • Post a link to the WeWriWa site on your blog/Sunday post
  • Keep your excerpt 10 sentences or less (8-10, no more!)
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Today, despite plans to move on to other works, I once again offer an except from my JatWW fanfiction, the Was Long Variation, nine sentences for the ninth post, now from the palace armory:

“She said they had a history of war,” his friend muttered. The man paused to analyze a particularly vicious-looking set of swords with hook-like serrations along the upper side of the curved blades. His expression suggested an uneasy familiarity with the weapons.

“What?”

Herc glanced at Nytramli who was at the moment surveying a rack of swords with a critical eye. He turned back to Jayce and shrugged. “It’s hard to see these people and see warriors. I should know better since we’ve done our best to turn Flora into one, but it doesn’t mean it seems real. Or right.”

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32 responses to “A History of War

  1. I love this! On the surface, they’re just looking at weapons, but in reality they’re saying a lot about their world and themselves.

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  2. Those rookies, yes I can see how it would be hard to see the warrior in them. Great scene!

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  3. Powerful snippet, Eden. “…hook-like serrations and curved blades.” I like your description. Drew me right in. Great Eight!

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    • Little details like those just seemed to matter. We’ll see how they hold up to an editor’s pen someday. Thank you , Paula.

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  4. Very thoughtful snippet. I have a vivid picture of the swords you described, and I’m intimated by them– which is saying something because almost every fight scene I write has some kind of sword or blade in it! Great work πŸ™‚

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    • Thanks, Amy. I wasn’t trying to intimidate the reader… yet. But then, some of the worst wounds in this story don’t come from man-made weapons.

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  5. its amazing how we get caught up in everything around us. glad you got your post up πŸ™‚ interesting snippet and has me curious

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  6. Interesting use of the swords to make a worldbuilding point – great snippet!

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  7. Eden, you sound so much like me πŸ™‚ I hope you’re enjoying your holiday and getting some much needed rest! I loved this vivid and descriptive snippet.

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  8. I love they phrase “an uneasy familiarity with the weapons”. Very evocative. Nicely done Eden.

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  9. Fascinating snippet. What happens next?

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  10. he definitely has a trained eye for the weapons…and I suspect a trained hand as well. πŸ™‚ Good scene, Eden. Incredibly smooth writing!

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  11. chellecordero

    The familiarity with the weapons and the obvious guilt about turning someone into a warrior is intriguing. I look forward to reading on and understanding more.

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    • Well, I can’t imagine that most people who train soldiers like the fact that many of the young men and women they are teaching will come home injured or mentally harmed, if at all. They train them because they know that wars WILL happen and that young men and women will die and hopefully they can save a few more by teaching them the best that they can. It doesn’t make it a comfortable choice though.

      Thanks for the comment, Chelle.

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  12. Interesting descriptions of the weapons.

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  13. Ah. I gather these folks look too peaceful to be warlike. Looks can be deceiving!

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  14. Really nice description in this excerpt! I can clearly picture the swords and understand how such sophisticated weaponry might be too much for non-warriors to handle. Well done! πŸ™‚

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    • Thanks, Evelyn. Though… that is the trouble with Jayce. He doesn’t really like considering himself a ‘non-warrior’… then again, he is, just not in everything like he’d like to think he was.

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  15. Nice tension and foreboding images in this one. I’m really going to have to google JatWW and find out what it is!

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  16. Great snippet! Eerie, what do they have up their sleeves. Nice, loving it.

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