#WIPpet Wednesday: Yes, Captain?

A few things lately made me wonder if I wasn’t doing these WIPpets a bit wrong. The first was a post fellow ROWer Tonya Cannariato linked to in one of her recent check-ins (Tonya’s check-ins are awesome… she reads and posts cool links every week) about how we don’t really retain media we watch or read. The other came to me when I was reading through some of the posts my fellow Weekend Writing Warriors have made… where they post both their last week’s post and the new one (most, though not all, WeWriWas post consecutive snippets of their works) so that their readers can follow the action easier.

Before I go off an totally change formats here, I’d like your input.  Would it help you all, if I added the last entry into the post before I posted the new snippet?  Obviously I would only do this on weeks I was serializing the story….  but would it help in those cases?

Today I am still serializing that bit of story I’ve been playing with where ‘Listii is having nightmares and seeing someone who just shouldn’t be there.  I have seven sentences for the day. Seven raw sentences… just edited for readability.

He looked up now. None of his visions had spoken to him in Visse’s voice before. And it didn’t matter how many years may have passed—he wasn’t going to mistake her voice.

The vision faded. Instead of his sister’s dark eyes, this girl’s were a soft pale grey almost rheumy. He realized he was scowling at her and the water was just that as a tear slid along the side of her stub nose,

“Yes Captain?” she asked after a surreptitious sniffle.

I hope to hear your opinions, both on the snippet and on my idea.   For those of you who have never participated in this bloghop, why not head over to the WIPpet linky and visit some our other awesome members. Thank you, Emily, for being such a gracious host.

10 responses to “#WIPpet Wednesday: Yes, Captain?

  1. Ooh, I wonder what she’s so upset about.

    As for serializing and posting the previous snippet, I don’t know. Maybe? Or maybe just the last sentence to remind us? I don’t post previous ones myself, so I’m not sure.


    • Well, he has been pretty rude to her, and now he’s staring at her…

      The last few lines… that might work. I’d like to post smaller posts these days, but something a small post can just leave one a bit lost.

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  2. WIPpets is new to me – what an interesting concept. You might give your idea a trial run and see how it works out. This seems to be a trial and error kind of process. Thanks for stopping by ATFM on IWSG Wednesday!


    • You may be right. A lot of these sorts of challenges are “by personal taste”. Thanks for the input, and you’re definitely welcome. 🙂


  3. A link to a previous entry would definitely help. I read so many things during the week that it’s hard to keep track of everything. A resounding yes vote from me!

    I’m definitely intrigued. The writing drew me in instantly. I love your writing style and can’t wait to read more!


    • Thanks for the suggestion (and the compliment), Denise. I totally hear you on the “It’s hard to keep track after a busy week” thing.


  4. Sounds like an interesting hop, but I’m doing well to keep up with the ones I’m already participating in. I think giving the reader more information is better than less. It saves them the time of clicking through links to find the other pieces. Just label things clearly in case they don’t need to reread.


    • I hear you! There are so many wonderful writing groups online, it’s hard to keep up with them. The Weekend Writing Warriors is a much bigger group of the same type as the WIPpet, so it’s an easy transition for me. But I can easily see how it might be a challenge for others,

      And thank you for your insights. I was erring on the side of a shorter post… but as you say, if it’s so short people need to click all over or reread, that’s more of the reader’s time and energy spent than just posting a longer piece.


  5. I do what I call a setup– time, place, what’s generally going on. Just a line or two, and, occasionally, I will share the first line from the week before if the new post is a direct continuation.

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    • It’s interesting that you share the first line of the previous post. I do get it though. A lot of time people won’t need to click on the link to it because the first line or two might call them back into the piece.

      Thanks for the perspective.

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